Metalworking is not my first skill, and many of the questionable sections of your article are probably technical in nature, not grammatical. Also, the lack of paragraphing in your text makes it more difficult to read. I'll go through it sentence by sentence and tell you where I think it's rough.
(Many of the "rough spots" are the sort of thing I used to find in my classmate's papers, by the way. They aren't really indicative that English is the second language of the writer.)
First is the original sentence, then my version of syntax and grammar. This is a rough draft, requiring further review. Paragraphing can be discussed later. :-)
Also note this was done as an excuse to delay going outside to shovel snow. Which I am now about to go and do.
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Different microstructures and mechanical properties can be developed in a variety of annealing temperature.
---Possibly change "in" to "at": Different microstructures and mechanical properties can be developed at a variety of annealing temperatures.
An investigation was undertaken to examine effect of annealing temperature on microstructure and mechanical of dual phase steel under simulated hot-dipped galvanizing.
------ An investigation was undertaken to examine the effects of annealing temperature on microstructure and mechanical properties of dual phase steel, under simulated hot-dipped galvanizing conditions.
The steel (of composition 0.15wt%C 0.1wt%Si 1.7wt%Mn) was obtained at three different heating temperatures (790?, 820?, 850?) by continuous annealing experiment thermal simulator.
---- here, I fall down. I'm okay with this part: The steel (of composition 0.15wt%C 0.1wt%Si 1.7wt%Mn) was obtained at three different heating temperatures (790?, 820?, 850?)
----- but when I get here, I'm a little confused. by continuous annealing experiment thermal simulator.
----Do we mean, we used a "continuous annealing experiment thermal simulator"?
-- or did we use continuous annealing in a thermal simulator as an experiment?
--- a little more explanation is in order, I think.
The microstructures were observed by the optical microscope and transmission electron microscopy, and the mechanical properties were tested.
The microstructures were observed using an optical microscope and transmission electron microscopy, and the mechanical properties were tested.
Under hot-dip galvanizing condition, the effect of annealing temperature on microstructure and the relationship of microstructure and mechanical properties have been investigated.
Under hot-dip galvanizing conditions, the effect of annealing temperature on microstructure and the relationship of microstructure to mechanical properties were investigated.
Increasing the annealing temperature, martensite volume fraction increases, and intergranular carbide reduces and ferrite intragranular carbide becomes small.
------ Again, I'm not sure. I think this is what it means: When the annealing temperature is increased, martensite volume fraction increases, intergranular carbide reduces, and ferrite intragranular carbide becomes small.
When the annealing temperature is 790?, most of martensite distributes intergranular region.
--- a little problem with the degree symbol. Mac, Windows, and Unix
-- often disagree about it. I am also stumped about what's happening
-- with the martensite. I know it's a displacive rather than diffusive
-- crystaline structure but don't know if it's being transformed
-- or whether it's redistributing itself, or whether it's doing something
-- to the intergranular region.
When the annealing temperature is 790 degrees, most of the martensite distributes to the intergranular region.